The Further Altered Story

The scene starts off with an important man in car with (two?) bodyguards (or cronies), there are soldiers lying in wait. As the car approaches, they take out the tires (or something else to get the car to stop), the car stops and two of the guards get out and retern fire. They get riddled with lead. One of the guys gets out to fight and Ted grabs a handgun from the glovebox and starts shooting. Eventually everyone in the car is dead apart from Ted. He runs out of ammo, so the soldiers move in and waste anyone still alive. One of the bad guys is on the ground, shot but still reaching for a gun, but is swiftly killed in cold blood by a soldier as he runs past. Ted gets dragged out and shot in the face. 2-4 Mercs vs. 2-3 Important baddies. Expendables-style intro scene. The segment is filmed from the point of veiw of the soldiers, they are the good guys even though they have just killed about three people in cold blood. We have changed to this plot rather than have a group of high end mercs taking out a drunk guy, that seemed a little excessive. We also introduced more bad guys, so as to even out the fight and also mean that we can put a lot more action into our thriller, with the old plot we wouldn't really be able to use the guns too much, which would be boring. It also makes a lot more sense, for example, why would the important man be drunk and if he was drunk, why wouldn't the mercinaries just wait untill he crashed his car by himself and kill him then and make it look like an accident (assuming he's not already dead).